Chapter 5 has been rewritten! · 8:35pm Dec 30th, 2016
I've finally finished rewriting chapter 5, as the title states. This one gave me a little bit of trouble, though only because the farm scene got a little slow.
I've finally finished rewriting chapter 5, as the title states. This one gave me a little bit of trouble, though only because the farm scene got a little slow.
After writing the last chapter of Wilting Flower, I decided I wanted a break from doom and gloom and decided to try rewriting again. Chapter three really needed it, once I read back through it.
Like before, please don't read below if you don't want to see the potential spoilers that may follow in the below change list.
The Changelist:
-I readded the scene with Pinkie, but this time it went much differently. Still not quite sure why I had her leap on him before in the original...but whatever.
I was sick and tired of reading a somewhat decent first chapter and then proceeding on to the crap cheese-fest that was chapter 2, so I finally got around to rewriting it. After all, if I'm not satisfied by reading it, then how can I expect my readers to be?
Wow, it took me a pretty long time on this one, as the scenes seemed to drag on, and I had some crazy real life crap get in the way that I'm sure you don't want to hear about. Either way, this chapter is done, leaving only chapter 7 for me to rewrite before arc 1 is finished! Though it's come to my attention that chapter 1 needs some adjustments to make it more in line with the Seth established in chapters 2-6. It probably doesn't need a full rewrite, but it definitely needs to lose the
This one gave me a lot of trouble, as every little word seemed to resist me on its way out. Other times my motivation was at an all time low. I already stated it in the author's note, but I'll say it again here. The amount of attention these rewrites are getting is very little. There's nothing more discouraging than spending a month working on a chapter, posting it, and then getting maybe a single comment. I don't get it, as every time I used to post a chapter, I'd get six or seven in the
For all of you guys following me, I finally got around to rewriting the first chapter. Basically, it's similar to what it was, but I went through and improved on the flow and the description, and made Seth into more of a well defined character instead of just a cursing mess. I also improved on the relationship between him and Amaryllis, such that his random declaration of love for her in chapter 2 doesn't seem...well, random.
If for some reason you haven't read past my rewrites (which I don't mind, because I know the originals are bad), keep in mind that there are minor spoilers in the changelist to come. And without further ado...
The Changelist:
Over the time I've spent writing the sequel, it's come to my attention just how little views and and comments the story has been getting in comparison to Tales of the Oppressed as it is currently, even at it's slow decline into obscurity. My editor and friend, ScootalooFTW, brought to my attention that this may be because many of my previous readers are not aware of the sequel's existence.
What Planetside 2 faction would you use to massage your five hundred feet tall, giant Overpowered Pony?
The Terran Republic's rapid firing traditional weapons, rapid fire Prowler tanks, combined with good old rapid firing miniguns and rapid firing rocket launchers for the average foot soldier, topped off with their Maxes being able to fire their guns at faster speed when in lock-down.
For those of you wondering where I am or why I'm taking over a full month to post something, allow me to explain. This type of wait is not typical for me.
This summer semester is my last semester in college; after this I graduate. Therefore, the classes I'm taking now are the hardest I've ever taken (artificial intelligence and computational models) and the assignments take well over 75% of each of my days.
After some discussion with my editors, I decided to open up the Discord group we use to the public! For those of you who aren't up to date on a Wilting Flower, I wanted to put the link in a blog post so that you can easily find and join the group!